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Aim for All Stuff and No Fluff

The goal of your written materials (and your interview) is to distinguish yourself from everyone else to demonstrate that you are worthy of a competitive medical school or residency slot.

Therefore, it’s critical that you avoid flowery or trite language, as using it does the opposite of making you distinctive. Recently, I read a piece by Lisa Miller called, “When Did Everything Become a ‘Journey’” about the overuse of the word. Miller cites Northern Arizona University linguistics professor Jesse Egbert who notes that “journey,” as a noun, has almost doubled in American English since 1990. 

In her piece, Miller also includes a wry quote from a Los Angeles clinical psychologist who describes the word “journey” as “eye-rollingly cheapened.” In editing personal statements, I see the word used frequently – maybe once in every four essays I revise.

Good writing takes a lot of time – brainstorming, outlining, and many drafts. Make sure your written materials are the best they can be by being diligent about your process (and by getting professional help).

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How Sesame Street Can Help You Write a Good Medical School Personal Statement

I learned an interesting fact years ago: When small children don’t understand something, they will simply tune it out and start to engage in another activity. That’s why great shows like Sesame Street use professionals to make sure their content is precisely age-appropriate. Children – and adults – don’t like being confused, and you can’t blame them.

In their personal statements, some medical school candidates make the mistake of referring to an accomplishment without explaining it. This is understandable since we are all intimately familiar with what we’ve done. The problem is that the vast majority of application readers are way too busy to do independent research or go back and forth checking an applicant’s supporting documents if she writes something that isn’t crystal clear.

I remember a talented candidate I advised who showcased an award she had won. She listed the name, but didn’t explain what it was. When I asked her, she told me the award was an academic honor given to only the top 1% of students out of several thousand. I was impressed! And, I asked her to rewrite the section so that her admissions readers would give her the credit she deserved for that extraordinary accomplishment. Because the medical school admissions process is so competitive, what you fail to adequately explain counts against you.

On a related topic, don’t expect a reader to understand something in your essay because it’s explained in your AMCAS activities. Different faculty members will approach the application in different ways, so – to get “full credit” for your accomplishments – you need to assume that your reader is seeing your essay first, independent of your AMCAS activities. Ensure your personal statement can stand alone and doesn’t rely on your AMCAS Activities section for clarification.

Contact me for help with your written materials. I have read thousands of essays, and I personally review every document sent to me.

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AI-Generated College Essays

“I hope this letter finds you well…”

When my family and I played around with ChatGPT – asking it to craft silly letters to different people – every ChatGPT response started with that phrase. I quickly realized that originality is not ChatGPT’s strong suit.

On top of the fact that most institutions consider AI-generated essays to be unethical (even plagiarism, at Yale), an applicant’s ability to write something distinctive (and persuasive) is really what demonstrates his or her worthiness for competitive university spots.

I found this amusing New York Times piece called, “We Used A.I. to Write Essays for Harvard, Yale and Princeton. Here’s How It Went” reinforced my strong distaste for AI-generated personal statement writing.

Although challenging to craft, your written materials are a tremendous opportunity to showcase your creativity and further your candidacy.

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Brevity is the Soul of Wit

As Shakespeare so wisely pointed out, being concise is critical for good writing. I’ve edited a lot of personal statements over the last few months, and I deliberately recommend a word count of 800 or fewer for a couple of reasons:

First, I’ve found that 750 to 800 words is just the right balance of content and streamlining: Over that number lends itself to a meandering admissions essay. Second, your reader is likely reviewing scores of applications. S/he is looking to limit time, while still getting a good flavor for your candidacy. Don’t burden your reader with verbiage.

Having trouble being brief? Here is some guidance:

1) Avoid flowery language. You can omit many non contributing phrases or sentences if you follow this guideline.

2) Read through your writing aloud. Oftentimes doing so will make clear what can be cut.

3) Imagine AMCAS, AACOMAS, or ERAS are charging you $10 per word. How would you keep costs down?

4) Avoid constructions like “I was able to…” and “I chose to…” Instead of “I was able to publish…,” try “I published…”

5) Cut out unnecessary prepositions: “As a volunteer at the university…” can change to “As a university volunteer….”

6) Use abbreviations to your advantage, but only after you define them the first time they are introduced: “At the University of Southern California (USC), I wrote…” Then, you can use “USC” to your heart’s desire, avoiding unnecessary characters.

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Pared to the Bone

I heard a great Fresh Air interview of Siddhartha Mukherjee, who was a lovely acquaintance of mine at Harvard and who has since won the Pulitzer Prize for his book The Emperor of All Maladies. Sid is a hematologist/oncologist clinician/scientist who has a new book out called The Song of the Cell. 

Terry Gross asked Sid how he successfully writes for both the scientific community through his journal articles and for lay people through his books – two different skill sets. Sid responded by explaining the importance – for any genre – of crafting manuscripts that are “pared to the bone,” meaning they avoid verbiage. His recommendation was excellent advice for any writer, even one who is crafting a personal statement. Take a listen to the full interview with Dr. Mukherjee here

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About Dr. Michelle Finkel

Dr. Michelle Finkel

Dr. Finkel is a graduate of Stanford University and Harvard Medical School. On completing her residency at Harvard, she was asked to
stay on as faculty at Harvard Medical School and spent five years teaching at the world-renowned Massachusetts General Hospital.
She was appointed to the Assistant Residency Director position for the Harvard Affiliated
Emergency Medicine Residency where she reviewed countless applications, personal statements and resumes. Read more

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