Compare the following:
“I am a compassionate person with a lot of resolve who wants to help people through medicine.”
“My four years of clinical work in a low-income clinic, taking vital signs and translating for Spanish-speaking patients, has strengthen my resolve to become a physician.”
See the difference?
A quick reminder: In your personal statement it’s critical to demonstrate your points with examples, rather than just state your thoughts. Show. Don’t just tell because anyone can say s/he is good with patients, kind-hearted and hard-working. Only a few excellent candidates can prove that.
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